Cold War Thing I Wrote

[TCOF]

Hey I'm just trying to see what other people think of this. I like it though.The Cold War EraWorld War II has just endedBut now the real chaos beginsWho controls the country that is so shaded?Some want to rebuild but take away their weaponsOthers just want them to stay dividedThis is the beginning of the clashing of interestsThe biggest world superpowers have collidedThe world?s biggest race ever has begunHowever this race is not of the normNo longer is the question who has the best timeBut rather who has the most bombs on the cheapest dimeMore and more nukes are being madeMankind has many new games to be playedHowever these games are not for the fun of itBut rather to see which country survives the bottomless pitAll over the world nuclear plants are foundFrom Turkey to Cuba the plans seem soundHowever creative politics come into playTo prevent the world from being turned into clayThe US wishes to contain their enemyThe USSR wishes to spread their policyWho knew it would come to the brink of all out war?Former allies now wanting to crush each other more and moreThey call Vietnam the longest war for the USABut the Cold War was much longer wouldn?t you say?Billions upon billions were spent in this timeTo make sure the US rang the last chimeSome say the Soviet Union lost and that America picked up the winBut how many things found in this era only wound up in some bin?There may never be one true winner of the Cold WarHowever it is absolutely certain it was not a boreIn finding more and more ways to destroy faster and fasterThe world has found out that people in control is now the master

 

[Agent Zero]

You started three lines with "However". Try to come up with a different word. :thumbsup:But it's good other than that.

 

[Capt. Comeback]

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE </div><div class='quotemain'>But the Cold War was much longer wouldn?t you say?</div>No. It wasn't an actual war, there was only conflict in technological differences and the race to be more advanced than the other country. Vietnam was the worst war in US history. But, I guess you're fine though.

 

[PurplePeopleEaters]

It's decent. When writing poetry you want to focus more on the meaning of the last word in each line. In this it seems like you used a rhyming dictionary and formed the lines around the rhyme. That makes for badly written poetry in my mind.That being said you'll probably get a good grade.

 

[Jon_Vilma]

I'd critique but I'm no poet myself so I have no right to judge.

 

[Nebkreb]

strange coincedence, but just today I reread and editted an old poem i wrote about religion adn then I read this.I liked it, but try to mix up the rhyming scheme a little bit, seems to be backtoback rhymes in each stanza (aabbccdd) which can be a bit boring. Try to develop a little rhythm throughout and you wanna end strong.

 

[DevinHester23]

Screw rhymes:Here is a good poemeople think I can't write a poemBut they are so wrongI can write a poemI wrote this poemI wrote this oneAnd gave it the titleG's poemSO SHUT UP!!AND DON'T EVER SAY I CAN'T WRITE A POEM AGAIN!!

 

[Agent Zero]

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (DevinHester23 @ Jun 11 2007, 12:49 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}></div><div class='quotemain'>Screw rhymes:Here is a good poemeople think I can't write a poemBut they are so wrongI can write a poemI wrote this poemI wrote this oneAnd gave it the titleG's poemSO SHUT UP!!AND DON'T EVER SAY I CAN'T WRITE A POEM AGAIN!!</div>