First Tournament: Jonah v J_Ray

[DynastYWarrioR6]

J_Ray will start, Jonah you will respond.

You guys have from 10/13/2008 til 10/20/2008 to get in all three verses EACH.

 

[J_Ray]

It's slaughter time again, this might get sad
This lyrical genious has just gone mad
Re-inventing hannibal, about to eat you alive
You're in a flood of fear with no chance to survive
You can't build an arc in this little of time
I'm the best MC since Tu-Pac in his prime
I got rhymes-o-plenty like Stockton had dimes
Always amazing crowds after I drop my rhymes
Even getting a "Wow" out of the little old mime
Close this thread before it's a scene of the crime​

 

[Jonah]

It's slaughter time again, this might get sad
This lyrical genious has just gone mad
Re-inventing hannibal, about to eat you alive
You're in a flood of fear with no chance to survive
You can't build an arc in this little of time
I'm the best MC since Tu-Pac in his prime
I got rhymes-o-plenty like Stockton had dimes
Always amazing crowds after I drop my rhymes
Even getting a "Wow" out of the little old mime
Close this thread before it's a scene of the crime​

Let me introduce myself, an Aussie stealth whose soon to be known
From the biggest city down to where the greenest grass is grown
My flows straight out of the Nile, metaphors will leave you in denial
Rhymes more twisted than an incestuous pedophile
I'm Jack the Ripper, to me you're just a minimal criminal
Whose only crime is a horrible murder of all things lyrical
Come back if you can, less luck than Allan Houstan
Fuck your father, I fucked your mother and I'm the new man
The bitch ain't Asian but she sure as hell can bang cock
Now with that this thread now needs to be locked


(3 verses for each round? Isn't that a little much)




​

 

[J_Ray]

This thread is on full locked down for full cage match brawl
Here's my one hitta quitta knocking you down like the "Great" China Wall
Think you can JACK my lines without me having to RIP ya?
"Yes that's my son" your mom says and we close the body bag zipper
"Houston we're ready for take off" since my first name is Jordan
You shouldn't of messed with me cuz I'm a "Bad Man" once said the Warden
The one thing I am giving to you is that you are a lyrical killer
Since most of your stuff wouldn't even be used as a line filler
That flood of fear is setting in, already making you start to blunder
So run back to your Aussy home because your going down under
My words are making an impact as if they were as straight-up Thunder
So just give it up now kid, you'll never be anything more than a Boy Wonder
​

 

[Jonah]

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This thread is on full locked down for full cage match brawl
Here's my one hitta quitta knocking you down like the "Great" China Wall
Think you can JACK my lines without me having to RIP ya?
"Yes that's my son" your mom says and we close the body bag zipper
"Houston we're ready for take off" since my first name is Jordan
You shouldn't of messed with me cuz I'm a "Bad Man" once said the Warden
The one thing I am giving to you is that you are a lyrical killer
Since most of your stuff wouldn't even be used as a line filler
That flood of fear is setting in, already making you start to blunder
So run back to your Aussy home because your going down under
My words are making an impact as if they were as straight-up Thunder
So just give it up now kid, you'll never be anything more than a Boy Wonder
​

In this rap game, you aint got shit on me
I go a capella and you sing off key. Adjacent to me
I'm complacent to be, this rap test i aced it.
When I step to battle, wannabe mc's take heed
I'll hammer you quicker than a carpenter on speed
My lyrical assault will make you bleed
Stay ambitious while I get malicious, my rhymes are vicious
Cause of your death is suspicious; asphyxiated on dicks
Like yo momma, coz like her you flow once a month
I've got more connections than Telstra
But this isn't a rip off scam, this shit'll actually help ya my man.
Before ya eyelids flicker the street's a chalk line thicker






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[J_Ray]

In this rap game, you aint got shit on me
I go a capella and you sing off key. Adjacent to me
I'm complacent to be, this rap test i aced it.
When I step to battle, wannabe mc's take heed
I'll hammer you quicker than a carpenter on speed
My lyrical assault will make you bleed
Stay ambitious while I get malicious, my rhymes are vicious
Cause of your death is suspicious; asphyxiated on dicks
Like yo momma, coz like her you flow once a month
I've got more connections than Telstra
But this isn't a rip off scam, this shit'll actually help ya my man.
Before ya eyelids flicker the street's a chalk line thicker
​

Let me grab some of that chalk before I pimp slap you silly
There is no brotherly love, we're nowhere near Philly
Flow once a month? It's a constant flow cuz I am the Mainstream
Growing up to be just like me was just your childhood dream
Sorry your idol has to break you down, leaving you no self-esteem
You messing with me man? That speed definitely must of been extreme
What kind of wannabe MC keeps bringing up their opponent's momma?
Oh yeah, the guy that can only get booked in Mexico with people saying "Como se llama?"
The only stuff I might use from your lines is a little lame comma
I'm a worldwide phenomenon while you get gigs at the local Bowl-a-rama
The only person asphyxiating on a dick is your girl, she calls me "Le Coq Grande"
Like an Umair Porn line, all she says is "Oh my, keep giving it to me J_Ray"
So we're ending this with one big climax, but of course you'll see it on Imax
Me winning is already part of the facts, cased closed, time to sit back n' relax​

 

[Денг Гордон]

My vote goes to J Ray by default, as Jonah never rebuttled his last verse.

Both had pretty decent flow and style. The attacks are horrible. I killed you, pimp slapped you, fucked your sister/mother/father, etc. are not good attacks. They are not original, and not fun to read, and are smutty. I thought this line was good "So run back to your Aussy home because your going down under", but the problem with it, is that it wasn't after a great attack, or leading into a great attack, so it was useless.

 

[DynastYWarrioR6]

Yeah I also didn't like how Jonah didn't rebuttal J_Ray's verse. Means that his last verse was simply out of desperation to crank one out.

J_Ray for me.

 

[Jonah]

Sorry I have exams at the moment (biggest exams of my life, to finish school) so I've had other priorities recently. I can do a rebuttal today if it's any consolation?

 

[DynastYWarrioR6]

Sorry I have exams at the moment (biggest exams of my life, to finish school) so I've had other priorities recently. I can do a rebuttal today if it's any consolation?

It won't matter when it comes to the outcomes, and focus on school!

But if it makes you feel better you can do it lol

 

[Jonah]

Yeh actually I don't care that much anyway

 

[huevonkiller]

Sorry I have exams at the moment (biggest exams of my life, to finish school) so I've had other priorities recently. I can do a rebuttal today if it's any consolation?

Yeah don't worry about it, at least you participated. :]