Fire Safety Poem

[umair]

Hi, everyone. This is Umair's brother (pakman) on forums. I only have like 30 posts so I couldn't post here and didn't want to get on the mods bad side by posting in the wrong section. So here it is..

This is for a school project, it has to be a page long. I've worked on it a bit, but im not so great with rhyming. REMEMBER - It has to be factual information, this can be considered a bit of rap, but no garbage stuff. Only factual information.

This is what I got so far..


Always remember to stop drop and roll
Saving your life is the goal
Make sure your smoke detector is up to date
'Cause when your house catches on fire, it can decide your fate
Get down with your family and create a fire plan
Its going to help one day, trust me man
Check your fire extinguisher here and there
Learn these rules so you can get out and share
If something catches on fire, get adult help or call 9-1-1
Never play with matches, its not cool, neither is it fun
Incase of fire, crawl under the smoke and heat
Follow the rules and you shall never suffer defeat

Thats my work right there, if you think some other line makes more sense or seems to rhyme better, let me know. If you can create a WHOLE new thing for me, that'd be awesome, since I know many of you in this section are good with rapping. So, do what you can to help me out guys. Any kind of help is REALLY appreciated. Im open to critism also.

This is due Tuesday. Last time i'll be checking this thread would be around monday night.

Thanks for reading, and looking forward to receiving your help.

-Pakman

 

[Chutney]

lol, Umair has a brother on JBB. Umair vs. Pakman freestyle battle: Let's get it on! (sarcasm).


Seriously though, I don't how much that assignment would be worth. Seems like busy work to me, so what you have looks good enough.

 

[B.e.]

Not bad for a school assisgnt, you sound a lot like your brother.

 

[Karma]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Air Fresh:</div><div class="quote_post">Not bad for a school assisgnt, you sound a lot like your brother.</div>

It's Umair, he just doesn't wanna embarrass himself by posting a Fire safety poem so he created an alter-ego

Just playin Umair...and yeah, it's not too shabby.

 

[umair]

Neh man I promise it was my brother. His name is Pakman on here. he couldnt post so he used my name. I promise it wasn't me.

 

[Legacy]

Umair has a brother? Have a rap battle! jp

 

[giftedvisionz]

The rhymes seem a bit forced. Since it's for school, and it's about fire safety, it should suffice.

 

[umair]

If yall dont wanna do the whole thing, just give me couple of lines. Please, show me how JBB likes to help its members. C'mon..

-Pakman

 

[Chutney]

Dude, do your own damn homework.

 

[Iggy]

I'll give you few lines. I've been dying to freestyle against someone!! Haha look for them some time later.

Do you mind giving me some information, I'm not too good with fire safety. I'll use the information and turn them into rap lines hah.

 

[giftedvisionz]

If you can come up with that, you should be able to write a page's worth. Instead of changing topics every line, state the topic first and spend another line or two explaining it. Details and imagery make for a more interesting poem. If you are allowed to type it, then double-spacing is your best friend.

Iggy, here's some useful info on fire safety.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fire_safety
http://www.survivealive.org/main.html

 

[umair]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Chutney:</div><div class="quote_post">Dude, do your own damn homework.</div>
I am not forcing you to help. Help if you want, ****. You guys have rap battles here and stuff so I thought this would be the appropriate place to ask.
<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Iggy:</div><div class="quote_post">I'll give you few lines. I've been dying to freestyle against someone!! Haha look for them some time later.

Do you mind giving me some information, I'm not too good with fire safety. I'll use the information and turn them into rap lines hah.</div>


http://www.firesafetyforkids.org/fire-safety-rules.cfm
http://www.ou.edu/oupd/kidsafe/fsaf_ans.htm
http://www.firekills.gov.uk/text_only/parents/03.htm

Here are some sites you can take the rules from and create a rhyme.

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting giftedvisionz:</div><div class="quote_post">If you can come up with that, you should be able to write a page's worth. Instead of changing topics every line, state the topic first and spend another line or two explaining it. Details and imagery make for a more interesting poem. If you are allowed to type it, then double-spacing is your best friend.</div>
Thanks man, that sounds good. Im gonna do that.

 

[Iggy]

How old are you pacman?

 

[umair]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Iggy:</div><div class="quote_post">How old are you pacman?</div>
Im 16. Its this.. stupid project from my Health Science 2 class.

-Pakman

 

[Iggy]

LMFAO! What kind of teacher gives a fire safety poem as a project in highschool hahah!~

 

[umair]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Iggy:</div><div class="quote_post">LMFAO! What kind of teacher gives a fire safety poem as a project in highschool hahah!~</div>
Well, there were a variety of choices all related to Fire safety in some way. The others were powerpoints and stupid boring usual stuff. So I decided to go with something fun. Then the teacher told me it had to be a page when I had already gotten all of that. So I didn't want to quit and do something else. So I decided to stick with it and thought some of you guys would help since your good with rap/rhyme stuff.
-Pakman

 

[Really Lost One]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Umair15:</div><div class="quote_post">Im 16. Its this.. stupid project from my Health Science 2 class.

-Pakman</div>
Youre older than Umair

 

[umair]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Brian:</div><div class="quote_post">Youre older than Umair

</div>
Yeah, so?

-Pakman

 

[Iggy]

K I'm done!

I made a 7 step plan part with what to do if you wake up during a fire.

waking up during a fire is a tough pill to swallow,
but if it happens, heres a few steps you can follow
step 1: if you think you smell smoke, check in case do not assume
it may be dark during a fire, so keep a flashlight handy in your room
step 2: know your fire plan, and who you're designated to help out
then safely check out your room and follow your fire escape route
you may feel terrified, but your situation will never be dire
step 3 is to bang on others' doors warning "FIRE! FIRE!"
step 4: if you cant get out, dont panic everything will be okay
because if planned everything right you should have an alternative way
step 5: if you get out of your room, stay down like you are small
remember to stay down, always fall and crawl
step 6: dont go back for anything, all your posessions you can replace
once your safely outside, go at your designated meeting place
now that your safe from the fire, the worse is now done
the final step is to go to a neighbors house to call 9-1-1

here are a few extra lines i thought up.


make sure you have smoke detectors on every floor in the house,
if not you might end up with a fire to douse
do not be afraid, stay calm and set your fears aside
if you see a fire dont hide, just go OUTSIDE!
if you think a rooms on fire check the knob with the back of your hand
then follow procedures to the fire escape route that you've planned


Tell me what you think!

 

[umair]

Ah, you OWN Iggy. I'll be honest and say, I couldn't have thought of those if it took me the whole day. YOU OWN!

Now, im gonna get off Umair's account and actually get enough posts so I can come here and post on my own account. THANKS IGGY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[Iggy]

No problem... when your dying to freestyle or rap, you think of shiz easily haha.

 

[Karma]

<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Iggy:</div><div class="quote_post">K I'm done!

I made a 7 step plan part with what to do if you wake up during a fire.

waking up during a fire is a tough pill to swallow,
but if it happens, heres a few steps you can follow
step 1: if you think you smell smoke, check in case do not assume
it may be dark during a fire, so keep a flashlight handy in your room
step 2: know your fire plan, and who you're designated to help out
then safely check out your room and follow your fire escape route
you may feel terrified, but your situation will never be dire
step 3 is to bang on others' doors warning "FIRE! FIRE!"
step 4: if you cant get out, dont panic everything will be okay
because if planned everything right you should have an alternative way
step 5: if you get out of your room, stay down like you are small
remember to stay down, always fall and crawl
step 6: dont go back for anything, all your posessions you can replace
once your safely outside, go at your designated meeting place
now that your safe from the fire, the worse is now done
the final step is to go to a neighbors house to call 9-1-1

here are a few extra lines i thought up.


make sure you have smoke detectors on every floor in the house,
if not you might end up with a fire to douse
do not be afraid, stay calm and set your fears aside
if you see a fire dont hide, just go OUTSIDE!
if you think a rooms on fire check the knob with the back of your hand
then follow procedures to the fire escape route that you've planned


Tell me what you think!</div>

You realize that you just did the guy's homework for him right? Regardless if you're freestylin or not. But hey, atleast your verse is better then his original one.

<div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post">
The others were powerpoints and stupid boring usual stuff.
</div>

Well, seeing as you had to take the trouble of singing on from your brother's account, posting a new topic and waiting 2 days or so for someone to completely help you out with a poem, wouldn't have it just been easier to do a powerpoint in the first place? What's so difficult about a powerpoint? Those things can make any presentation look slick if you put the effort into and make everything look nice.

Anyways, be sure to tell us what you actually ended up getting on this though.

 

[Iggy]

I enjoyed it. Hopefully Umair learns a few rhymes? haha

 

[umair]

Im his brother actually, Pakman on forums. Not really active though.

So yeah.. reportin back to yall (not like most care but.. yeah) ..

It went great, people thought it was creative and DIFFERENT that those boring powerpoints. Tell you the truth, there is only a certain level of creativity you can get to a powerpoint. Especially one about fire safety

...

SO yeah, my project went smooth. Help was extremely appreciated. Btw - Junoon, whats wrong with helping out someone with their homework. Its not like I copied someone's math homework where Im not learning something and am putting myself on the risk of failing the test.

Anyways, thanks Iggy.
I prolly got a high A! or... maybe 100 - that teacher likes creativity

-Pakman